Draft alteration – 2nd Verse

June 7th, 2010 | admin | Song

This needs to be changed into:

The day has quickly ended
watching another sunset tonight.
Holding you now so closely
to block out the chill in the night,
in Sandy Paradise.

This fits in to the beat of the first verse – including the single, double and triple syllable count.

No doubt – more drafting is required. That is for sure!
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